Review: Shy Girls Write It Better by May Sage

Posted August 6, 2018 by Shari in Reviews / 10 Comments

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I received this book for free from Free Book in exchange for an honest review.
This does not affect my opinion of the book or the content of my review.

Review: Shy Girls Write It Better by May Sage
Shy Girls Write It Better

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Series: Some Girls Do It Better
Genres: Contemporary Romance
Published by Small Publisher
Format: eBook
Source: Free Book
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This story had so much potential, but then it failed to reach that potential with a rushed plot, plot twists that seem off and an abrupt ending with no resolution. The idea was a cute one, but the heroine came off way to innocent. The hero is way to convincing. And pretty much it ended up sucking donkey balls.


Ok, I was a little harsh in my delight part, but I really wanted to like this book! Cassie is an accountant totally bored with her deadend job. To keep the boredom at bay, she starts writing romance when her work is done for the day. She is an Indie author with several books under her belt and she tries to come across that she has had a lot of success and is a savvy writer as well as business woman. It didn’t really come across well to be truthful.

When renovations to the executive floor push the CEO Carter Harris to move offices, he tries hard not to remember how taken in he is with Cassie since they first met. Now the clumsy, shy Cassie can’t stop staring at him, but knows it won’t go anywhere, or Carter’s part, he met her when his company hired her and even had her background checked out. He comes across as a cold, calculating asshole.

When Cassie mistakenly switches folder with Carter in the break room, she is quickly mortified trying to figure out how to get it back, but also not wanting him to know she writes romance books…especially on company time. Avoiding him seems to be the better option, but that’s not going to happen.

Carter realizes the mistake quickly while he is at home. Intrigued he starts reading and then editing the story. He thinks up a scheme to be her friend while advising her on her book. Big problem? It is a BDSM romance that neither of them have experience with even if the author of this book thinks Carter does.

So Carter starts mentoring Callie and it jumps right into the deep end fast. So fast as Cassie is a virgin who has no actual experience in anything.

So the problems….

  1. Carter really has no experience in BDSM. He offers and then performs a spanking to Cassie which seemed more awkward than realistic. That is the extent of the BDSM in the book.
  2. Cassie gives Carter a blow job in the office and suddenly she is a master at it even without any experience.
  3. Carter has “issues” … don’t all men it seems. He goes from being a bastard to suddenly a stalker with Cassie. He doesn’t want a relationship, but quickly falls into jealousy and finding ways to trap her to him.
  4. Cassie is way in over her head. I think you can write what you don’t know, but Cassie really pushes the envelope with this one. How she could be such a successful independent writer so fast is a little inconceivable.
  5. Cassie hides her side job from everyone. Family, friends and co-workers. Nobody knows her secret life.
  6. The ending…I won’t spoil it other than it is very abrupt and leaves a lot of the story hanging. No closure is more how I felt.
  7. Finally, this needed an editor. Misspellings, grammar issues and just a wrong tone to the story. And even the title on my Kindle has the wrong capitalization. It was a great idea that went wrong.

While I liked the idea of the story, the execution of it was like waiting a car wreck happen. It moved to fast and just became a mangled mess. Yes, it’s sexy. Yes, I wanted to read more. Unfortunately the story ends abruptly. I seriously thought my book was missing a chapter or two. No resolution, no ending. Just bang! Done!

This is the start of a series of books, but I am stopping here. I really wanted to love this story, but it felt like the plot wasn’t worked out and the author was writing their first story without an editor. Potential lost….


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Shari is the Delighted Reader. Married to her Prince Charming and mother to two Princesses and one Prince. When she is not slaving away as Cinderella she loves to get lost in the pages of a good book. Never without a reading device and a few good paperback books, because she never knows when she might get 5 minutes to read!

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Jenea Whittington
3 years ago

Oh no, sorry to hear you had some issues with this one. Thanks for sharing your thoughts n it, but I might have to steer clear of it.

Shari Delighted Read
Shari Delighted Read
3 years ago

I wanted to love it so much, but the interactions just felt awkward rather than sexy. There are more books in the series, but I don’t want to start on them if they continue this way.

3 years ago

oh complicated…. Not sure it would be someting for me I confess.

Shari Delighted Read
Shari Delighted Read
3 years ago
Reply to  Melliane

I really wanted to like it, it just didn’t work out.

Sophia Rose
3 years ago

Oh boy! I’ve read a few like that when it comes to the naive virgin who suddenly can do it like a porn star. I can see how the bad moments just kept piling up for you and, ugh, hate it when a book with so much potential fizzles out on me.

Shari Delighted Read
Shari Delighted Read
3 years ago
Reply to  Sophia Rose

Yeah, virgin acting like a porn start with a blow job then he acts like he just wanted to be friends as they worked on the book. Of course his secretary and mom won’t let it go that she is the perfect woman for him. ugh, the ending just did me in. At least I could have gotten a ending to a story that was already frustrating me.

Carole's Random Life
3 years ago

I will be avoiding this one for sure. I am sure that I would have quite a few issues with this one as well.

Bookworm Brandee
Bookworm Brandee
3 years ago

Aww, I’m sorry this one didn’t live up to its potential. It’s too bad because I agree with you that it could have been pretty great.

Carole Rae
3 years ago

Mmmm not sure about this one. :/

Mary @StackingMyBookShelves!

Sorry this wasn’t that great. I hate that but it happens.